Openers
1. Bob runs for his dear life as hungry a cannible chases him from the bushes.
2. Moby flips the omelette on the frying pan with sheer skill and marvels his sister.
3. Danny stares up into the sky as it was fuming with smoke from the forest fire.
4. Mark pulls out the dagger pierced into his right thigh and faints
5. Ron walks through the desert and suddenly falls into a mystical hole.
6. Harry falls to the floor in sudden shock realising that his hair is falling.
7. Michael gives out a loud horrific high pitched scream that is causing the birds to fly in an unsual speed.
8. Jonathan does a thunderous jiggle that causes the ground to crack.
9. Fergusson searches for his woman in the cold dark mist and feels someone grabbing his arm
10. John wears a pink tutu and begins to dance gracefully, the way he always wanted to.
11.Richie will finally dance the waltz with his grandmother. A wish he has always been wanting to fullfill
12. Isaac wishes that he can be the king of mambo.
April 27, 2007 at 1:49 am
1. Bob runs for his dear life as a hungry cannibal chases him from the bushes. He desperately screams for help yet only his voice echoes back to him.
He looks all over the place in search for a safe haven to hide in. Thick bushes, trees and little animals are all that he sees. With the cannibal hot on his heels and slowly catching up with him, Bob has no choice but to fight face to face with the angry savage. He looks for a weapon to defend himself. Broken branches and pitiful small rocks are only his available choices. He picks up as many branches and rocks as possible while the cannibal’s wild screams grow closer and closer.
Almost immediately when he finishes picking up the items, the savage comes out of the bushes with his machete. The cannibal stops and circles Bob like his prey. Bob is frightened to his wits.
Seconds pass as if it is eternity and finally, the cannibal makes his move. He lunges towards Bob and Bob swiftly jumps out of the way. Bob uses his rocks and throws with all his might towards the wild savage. However, the rocks are small and do little damage to the cannibal. The cannibal inches closer and closer to Bob. Bob starts to panic and his brain begins to think whether he is really going to end up in the savage’s stomach, or will there be a way out of this deadly situation.
It almost seems like a miracle when Bob hears a helicopter hovering over his head. He looks up and sees a helicopter throwing down a rope ladder for him to climb up. The roaring noise of the helicopter frightens the cannibal who runs away in fear. A huge relief comes upon Bob and he feels as though a heavy rock on his chest is lifted. He climbs up the rope ladder to safety and is flown to the nearest hospital for treatment for his cuts and bruises.
May 4, 2007 at 6:34 am
The effort to be visual is satisfactory, but not perfect. You have some difficulty with word choice. Some of the sentences have the wrong words in them. Others are simply confusing. For example, how can the sky fume? Or why do you choose the word “fall” twice in sentence 6?